it's a good work.
yes though I really don't care too much for rhyme poetry I never found the style too forced or too distracting that it would take the reader out the piece. It's sharp and simple and conveys the work with some good imagery and a well told message.
Sure the work may be a dark but you offer a deep insight despite the simple style you tell the tale with. It's a good job. I especially enjoyed the final lines in the story.
keep up the good work, just work on the structure a bit (more focused, for a better flow)
and you'll be even better.
Mike.
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